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I have thought out this poem twenty times over and over. Because of Bukowski, *intricately-ordinary, ~v-espertine, I feel like actually uploading this kind of poem. 

Also, I really want to thank you all for adding it to your favorites...just pretty much all the support I've received on this piece. I will reply to everyone individually soon, but I don't have the time just yet. Thank you all so much for your kindness. :heart: 
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themorningtrain Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
You're going to be someone someday. The next e.e. cumming and everyone on DA can superhipster out and say we knew you when you were some dude on the interwebs.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013   Writer
this comment of yours made my night when i saw it. i'm really sorry i never replied to it until now. i still don't exactly know how to reply to what you said...i don't think anyone has ever said something like this to me before. thank you so much for the high praise. it means the world to me that you think this way. 

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themorningtrain Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013
No problem! Just please continue writing poetry, it's really something very special.
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Efulums Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is beautiful. Just absolutely amazing. <3 I'm kinda stunned, lost for words. Simply wonderful. And my favouritest favourite part has to be the ending:

You are a sun without rays
because your last days
are spent between beautiful
insomnia and slumber. You
aren't worth the life you
take for granted. Write
until it feels like hell.

You are not a poet. You
never will be.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013   Writer
I apologize for the late reply! I haven't been on here long enough to produce a reply... 

Anyways, I want to thank you so much for the compliments. You are so sweet and kind! :hug:
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Efulums Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
 There's no need for you to apologise. c:

And you're more than welcome; it deserves all the praise I gave it. :hug:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
-Sigh- Mister, you're going to be someone someday, I know it. And when they start calling you Shakespeare, don't let it frighten you. I'll claim to have known you when "he was some obscure life on the internet." :heart:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013   Writer
OH my gOSH. i just don't even know how to respond to this properly adksidfh did you just seriously compare me to shakespeare whyyyyy fsdhfsdjkfh i'm no classic you silly goose aahhhh why are you so sweet to me you just ugh you lovely person thaaaank you i can't thank you enough ouCH
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

o.o Oh, are you okay? I think you've done enough thanking for one day...Maybe I should scatter the truth instead of giving it all in one comment. X3

...

:icongooseplz: :iconsaysplz: Thats Ms. Silly Goose to you.

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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
One of your most magnificent. :heart:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013   Writer
Seriously? You're so sweet. Thank you so much. And for adding it to your favorites, as well. :tighthug:
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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You're very welcome. And yes, seriously!
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bluedot3 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013
I dig it. Great flow. 
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm jealous of all you folks who are writing this and I'm just sitting here like "spoons."
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
I've had this idea since the summer, haha, I just didn't want to post anything like it at the time because I didn't consider it poetry then. :shrug: 

I'm sure if you would write something on this topic it would be amazing. :hug:
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AwkwardShinigami Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That... was necessary for someone to say.  Great work, I'm adding this to my favorites.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
Aw, thank you ever so kindly! It means a lot. :heart:
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AwkwardShinigami Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :)
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Backspace555 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
That was awesome. I sometimes feel like that when it comes to school. 
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! School, what do you mean? (Don't get me wrong, I'm totally okay with different interpretations than the original intention, but I'm not sure how school relates to it? It would be wonderful if you could let me know what you mean - your insight/interp) :hug:
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Backspace555 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
Well, I took the poem as a lost of hope, a lost of inspiration, a sort of lost of yourself. I took it as a person is having trouble dealing with his surroundings, if that makes sense. What I meant by school is that I don't get good grades, so I feel a bit hopeless sometimes because of my grades.

I also like these 2 particular lines.

"Write about depression and 
self-neglect as a joke."

"Keeper of souls but you can't even
keep your own. Don't ever
think about writing if
you know you can't."

I'm very sarcastic so when I make a negative joke, people look at me like woah man... take it easy. I was being sarcastic, but I feel like people take things a bit too serious. Also I tend to help people a lot, but I feel like I don't help myself enough. 

Ok sorry for rambling lol. 

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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
whioooops 

The :no: is supposed to be :nod: 
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
Huh, interesting. It's always really cool to see what others think about what my poetry means, especially if what they think is much deeper than the original intention. :no: I totally see how you got it from the poem though. Ohhh. Okay, that makes more sense. I'm sorry you feel that way. 

Thank you so much!  

Ah, okay. It's kind of hard to detect that over the Internet, unfortunatly, due to the lack of body language. It sucks, haha. 

No, you're fine!
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Backspace555 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
If theres one thing about poetry is that a person can interpret it in many ways. Personally I think the best writings are ones where many people interpret it different, and your's is definitely one of them. :D 
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
Yes! I totally agree that the best poetry is the kind that can be interpreted in multiple ways. Aw, thank you so much!
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DrMario08 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Student Writer
 Goddamn, you really show how powerful words can be, especially the last two lines, I applaud you good sir! :iconclapplz: :D 
Insta-fave!
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
Aw, thank you ever so kindly for all of the compliments! That means so much to me. :hug:
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DrMario08 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student Writer
You deserve it my friend ^.^
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katamaris4ever Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
SO MUCH PATHOS.
As in, being a writer myself, I totally get this. As much as I love happy poetry, I tend to write my best stuff when I'm under extreme stress or going through emotional trauma; it doesn't feel awesome at the time, but when I get out of that funk, I GET IT. It's like a Jekyll/Hyde dynamic, where my "bad" side is the more artistic one.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
For some reason, most time I write about something that is negative and relates to me, I can't write it when I feel that way. I have to wait until the next day or something. I tried to write happy poetry a few times and it wasn't bad, but nothing close to remarkable or even of the skill level I have. It's something I should work on but don't. ....sorry for the essay. 

Haha. I totally understand what you're saying. I think that, for most budding writers, it's easier to focus on the bad than good in writing but it's because people will react more to the bad instead of the good. It's weird. But you see that happening in the media. In America, the news always seems to talk about some kind of homicide but no one would really care if the news covered a story about a citizen doing good deeds for the community. It kind of sucks, haha, because I like hearing about good things, too...
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Arcana3 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Coming from being a fellow writer myself, I agree with you. Happy poems, and things like that never really work for me, true feelings are the ones that hurt. At least imo. I really like your poem, idk if you would like to, but could we exchange some poems some time? 
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :) 

What do you mean by exchanging? Like a feedback for feedback kind of thing? 
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Arcana3 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah sorrta like that :3 Idk if you would like to, but It would be cool to actually have a friend on deviant art... (Forever alone in the corner T_T) 
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
Sure, I'll be your friend and would be glad to give you feedback! Just send me a message sometime!
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PreussenSauce Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This makes me want to cry. Why would you say something so depressing?
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
I'm really sorry that it does. This poem wasn't supposed to be addressed to anyone other than myself. I wasn't expecting anyone to take it personally.
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PreussenSauce Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, well I must have taken it the wrong way.
And I'm sorry you feel that way about yourself.
It is, however, very nice wording. :D
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
Past self though. I was like this in middle school and the first year of high school - writing nonsense but trying to have mental disorders so it would make sense. It was the stupidest thing I've ever done. Haha. Thank you!
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PreussenSauce Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :D
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
:)
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Clostheman Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
Really well-written! Is literally saying that drawing on misery makes for the only good poetry, is it reflecting on the writer's experiences, or is it meant to be a caricature of the stereotypical poet?
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! Well, it's what I was told a lot when I was younger, and I was told that because of stereotypes of poetry and whatnot. So, it's kind of like a combination of the last two.
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Slayer730 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"Write about cutting out
your ribcage. Mean it."

Words of desperate beauty, all of them, but this moment sings the loudest.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you really like those two lines. Also, thank you so much for adding this to your favorites. :hug:
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Slayer730 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I quite liked the whole thing!
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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Songbreeze741 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
Roses are Red
Violets aren't Blue
I suck at writing poetry
I want a beer
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ssensory Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
Haha! That's a funny little thing. :)
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Songbreeze741 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
I try ^_^
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