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decided to make a title poem out of my own titles! haha! i was bored...

[ariel] was on [the doorstep]
[flooding the cradle]
& [pacific] said, [seasons
don't change]

[spitting out bodies]
of [seabirds]
[down the rabbit hole]
& [she] [don't breathe] 
              ^^ changed to didn't
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cality Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this! Having 'Ariel' at the beginning instantly grabbed my attention because I recently bought Ariel and loved it, hehe. 

Anyway, this is a very neatly done title poem. :love:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014   Writer
Thank you so much! I thought it was an interesting experiment to do, but became dissatisfied with its result. But I'm glad you enjoy it. :heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014   General Artist
such brilliance :icongrinstareplz:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014   Writer
aww, thanks. :heart:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I didn't even know this was a title poem until I read the artist's description :O

(dude, it's been a while. Got hitched already?)
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014   Writer
Nice. XDD 

(it has!! nope not yet lol still underage but we plan on it mid-twenties or early thirties)
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Underaged? How old are you both?
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014   Writer
16 and 17.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
seems a bit too young to be thinking about marriage-but hey love's beautiful! Is it that Sidore chick in your fb?
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014   Writer
well, we definitely don't want to get married right away because its quite foolish since weddings are expensive =p yep she is!
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Its an interesting poem, honestly... Makes me want to read your poems, instead of disecting it and writing a whole long comment about why it reminded me acutely of being alone and realizing that loneliness makes me weaker, acutely disrupts the quiet solitude I have at night and corrodes me... because it reminds me of my past and I don't want to enter that hell... ^^; sorry about that...

I guess that, in the end, if one has a really sad childhood, this title poem does manage to pull through... Even a sad adulthood tends to do that as well...

DannyMechanist and Honestly-Not and brokengod--veins might like this poem for sure. even PuzzledHeartBox .

Alll in all, a good work.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014   Writer
Thank you! Huh...that's depressing. I'm really sorry (and no need to apologize on your end, of course!). 

Hmm, I see what you mean. 

Aw, thank you so much for the shout out. I'm honored that you'd do that. 

Thank you!
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No worries, its all good. Sad childhoods and adulthood breed writers. So I'm glad about that.

:) How could I not? You're a wonderful writer!
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014   Writer
Sometimes, I think. I actually had a great childhood. I just have too many thoughts. =p

Thank you so much. :)
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah... not saying I don't, just that I had my fair share of ups and downs...
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014   Writer
I think we all definitely have. It's kind of hard to go through life without having downs.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amen there, hun. So true. couldn't have put it better myself.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014   Writer
:nod:
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songsforever Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
that's pretty genius hun...

well done and keep up the good work. :hug:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014   Writer
aww, thank you so much. :)
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014   Writer
This is a fun thing to do using your own titles!
I like this, bytheway, is beautiful in a somehow morbid kind of way :heart:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014   Writer
it is! i'm going to do more when i get in a block or just feel like doing something silly/fun! :XD: 
thank you so much! :heart:
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014   Writer
You're most welcome!
You made me want to do something like this soon, too (:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
all I can see is a mermaid flopping around at a mad tea party and it's making me laugh I'm sorry.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014   Writer
hahaha no that's hilarious. thank you. i needed some comedy. i totally see that now too oh my god XD
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Demorach Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha love how you did that with the titles of your previous poems :D
That's ingenious!!! XD
And it makes sense as well!!
LOVE IT <3
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sootandcinders Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
I love this :heart:
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